Peer Review : 권은정

Grade

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay?

5 points, technically perfect. I think she suggested persuasive arguments well.

She follows the classical arguments well

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I think it doesn't need to improve

Thesis

What is the thesis?

 Korea should concentrate on developing and widening cultural industry for future of Korea

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

Yes

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

Well, I think I can suggest opposite team's opinion, too.

Any other thoughts?

no

Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

I think there are no missing parts.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 

Obviously true. It comfortably lead me to the thesis

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

Yes

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

Maybe yes

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

It was clear and reasonable

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

Yes, it is good enough to get high score

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

Nothing special I have.

Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 

I agree with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

Of course, agree

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

NO

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

I think it's good enough

Research

Is the author using research effectively? 

Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?

Of course

Are the sources obvious?

Yes they are quite obvious.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

Most of them is relevant I think.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?

NO