Peer Review : 권예원

Grade

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay?

5 points, she explained her arguments logically with persuasive ideas. And I like clear definition of what she want to say. Also it is technically perfect.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I think her essay is excellent enough to get a good grade

Thesis

What is the thesis?

Korean wave has problem and Korean cultural diplomacy should solve this problem.

 

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

Obviously yes.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

I am also trying to change current Korean cultural diplomacy if I can wrote this essay.

Any other thoughts?

I have nothing special 

Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

I think there are no missing parts.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 

Obviously true. It's really interesting introduction.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

OF COURSE

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

YES and YES

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

Yes, she mentioned opinions of other people and excellently refuted it,

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 

Yes, it is great,

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

I don't have any suggestion. BUT I really think she correctly point out current situation of diplomacy and want her to become a good diplomat to correct that problem.

Persuasion

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 

I agree with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

There is no change

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

NO

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

I think it's good enough

Research

Is the author using research effectively? 

Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?

Of course

Are the sources obvious?
IN my though, they're quite correct sources.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Most of them is relevant I think.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
NO